got grammer?

[JPC-Greg]

Can someone lend me a hand in reviewing our site and especially new pages for grammer or spelling errors? Everything from our polocies, plans, network, to these few new pages that are not yet live and linked.

http://www.jaguarpc.com/?loc=reseller
http://www.jaguarpc.com/?loc=vps

Thanks in advance.

[Spathiphyllum]

...polocies...

http://www.jaguarpc.com/?loc=reseller

Well, here's a quick and dirty start. Don't have time to review it all at the moment but so far from the first link:

It's fast, easy and economical to open a reseller account. There are no long term (long-term?) contracts, no obligations or quotas to meet, (and?) no hidden fees...

2. Bulk reselling :
cost effe(i)cient, flexible

Partner Suite :
Cpanel (cPanel?)
Branding in your client(')s control panel
Accounts on powerful dual dual-core sytems (dualx2?)

[JPC-Greg]

they are dual dual-core , as in two dual-core . I was wondering if there was a better way to say that without it looking like a typo.. any ideas?

[Spathiphyllum]

Hmm.

...dual, dual-core systems (?)
...dual multi-core systems (?)
...dual, bi-mono-core systems

[Ron]

How about just "two dual-core CPUs"

The link on http://www.jaguarpc.com/?loc=reseller
for VPS points to dedicatedspace.com instead of the vps page.

[Vin DSL]

they are dual dual-core , as in two dual-core . I was wondering if there was a better way to say that without it looking like a typo.. any ideas?

I saw the Barbi Twins 'perform' at the Mile High Club in Denver once. How about 'Twin dual-core CPUs'?

[mattsiegman]

how about Multi (4) Core CPUs?

[Spathiphyllum]

"twin" seems right.

[Gwaihir]

It's fast, easy and economical to open a reseller account. There are no long term (long-term?) contracts, no obligations or quotas to meet, (and?) no hidden fees...

1 quotum
2 quota
perhaps 2 quotums works too, but not quotas AFAIK

Missing images: http://www.jaguarpc.com/styles/ambie...ages/arrow.jpg (many places)
http://www.jaguarpc.com/styles/ambie...rbut_wblue.gif (in the blue "3 styles" box)

Don't forget to link signup for these plans from the big "signup now" button on the left, as well, before "going live".

Reseller: link to VPS points back to the same reseller page. Shouldn't there be a section with reseller oriented info on VPS at the bottom - (the general VPS page doesn't really tell the pro's and cons of VPS as a reseller package)? Should then perhaps each of these three styles be a link to a bookmark?

Oh; and could I please have the $19.95/mo "basic" VPS plan with 7 GB / 128 MB / 150 Mhz / 150 GB?

[JPC-Greg]

Where are you getting those broken images? the ambience style has not been in use for some time so Im curious why your browser is loading it somewhere.

The plans arent in the singup yet on purpose, thanks for the reminder though. The vps link on the reseller page doesnt work in our site on purpose yet as well.

There does need to be an added section covering why to use a vps for reselling.

[Ron]

Somethings missing here.... the link(for vps plans) on the page you asked us to check (resellers) is not pointing to the other page you asked us to check(vps), it's pointing to dedicatedspace.com. I would think that when you went live with these pages that the vps link would want to point to the vps page... but I may just be confused.

[Gwaihir]

Where are you getting those broken images? the ambience style has not been in use for some time so Im curious why your browser is loading it somewhere.

I have little clue why it didn't show correctly for me then. Al I can think of is that it might have to do with Norton Personal Firewall on my pc, as that hasn't behaved fully up to spec lately (I'll be replacing it soon).

I just clicked the links from the starting post. Doing so again today (pc hasn't even been rebooted or anything) it does show correctly. The "arrow" was missing in all places in which I now see a blue bullet. The "order" button was missing in the blue "3 styles to choose!" box. But I see more changes as well: the 3 styles box now has a more fancy background (not "just plain blue), the VPS link in the box now points to dedicatedspace instead of back to the same page. Did you make changes? Did I get stuck on a very old cached version somehow? I dunno.

[Ron]

I get that situation sometimes when I've been logged into the clients section, then move around the site. I know it's happened once or twice after I've been booted out due to a session expiration.

I haven't been able to determine what exactly triggers it, but it does happen to me about once per week. I think I emailed or PM'd you on this once before, Greg.

[RomanyX]

From http://www.jaguarpc.com/?loc=vps

Need more than shared hosting has to offer but don't have the budget for a physical dedicated server? Get your own private server with root access, powerful and dedicated resources all for an affordable price. We now offer operating systems such as CentOS, Debian, Suse, and Fedora with the option to install Cpanel/WHM at no extra charge!

When ordering a VPS solution from JaguarPC, you'll also receive our remote backup service free of charge with disk space up to the size of your package available for your use. We support 3 different methods for using this backup service and they include Rsync over SSH, FTP, and SCP.

Each package comes with an administraton control panel to easily manage the VPS. This control panel is available even when the VPS is offline so you'll always have control over your private server. Click here to find out more about your Power Panel!

***

Will I get full root access?
You will have full root access to your VPS. You are able to configure your own software packages like Apache, MySQL, PHP, Perl, etc.

Will I be able to restart my VPS?
Yes, you will be able to control your VPS at all times from your VPS administrative control panel (Power Panel). Even during an unfortunate event when the VPS is not reachable, you'll be able to login to your Power Panel and start it.

Need more than shared hosting has to offer, but don't have the budget for a physical dedicated server? Get your own private server with root access, plus powerful and dedicated resources, all for an affordable price. We now offer operating systems such as CentOS, Debian, Suse, and Fedora; with the option to install cPanel/WHM at no extra charge!

When ordering a VPS solution from JaguarPC, you'll also receive our remote backup service free of charge, with disk space up to the size of your package available for your use. We support 3 different methods for using this backup service, which include Rsync over SSH, FTP, and SCP.

Each package comes with an administration control panel to easily manage the VPS. This control panel is available even when the VPS is offline, so you'll always have control over your private server. Click here to find out more about your Power Panel!

***

Will I get full root access?
You will have full root access to your VPS, and the ability to configure your own software packages such as Apache, MySQL, PHP, Perl, etc.

Will I be able to restart my VPS?
Yes, you will be able to control your VPS at all times from your VPS administrative control panel (Power Panel). Even during an unfortunate event when the VPS is not reachable, you will be able to login to your Power Panel and start it.

[RomanyX]

From http://www.jaguarpc.com/?loc=reseller Part 1:

Partner with JaguarPC.
Be your own web host!
It's fast, easy and economical to open a reseller account. There are no long-term contracts, no obligations or quotas to meet, and no hidden fees. The number of accounts you sell is completely up to you. All of our plans include our Partner Suite and guides to help you succeed and gain a competitive edge in the market.

3 styles
to choose!

1. Independent reselling :
Clustered, minimal risk, virtual hosting

2. Bulk reselling :
cost efficient, flexible

3. Virtual Private Server :
Maximum control

Partner Suite :
Cpanel
Custom private nameservers
Anonymous nameservers
Anonymous demo of the control panel for your clients
Instant account setups
Adminstration software
Fantastico
Free support ticket systems for use with your clients
Free Website templates
Second tier support from us for your clients
Branding in your client's control panel
Network status scripts for use on your own site
Merchant account with great rates
Free SSL to secure your own ordering process
Accounts on powerful dual dual-core sytems
Permission to use our site design and all its content

Partner with JaguarPC...
Be your own web host!
It's fast, easy, and economical to open a reseller account. There are no long-term contracts; no obligations or quotas to meet; and no hidden fees. The number of accounts you sell is completely up to you. All of our plans include our Partner Suite and guides, to help you succeed and gain a competitive edge in the market.

3 styles
to choose from:
1. Independent reselling :
clustered, minimal risk, virtual hosting

2. Bulk reselling :
cost efficient, flexible

3. Virtual Private Server :
maximum control

Partner Suite :
Cpanel
Custom private nameservers
Anonymous nameservers
Anonymous demo of the control panel for your clients
Instant account setups
Adminstration software
Fantastico
Free support ticket systems for use with your clients
Free Website templates
Second tier support from us for your clients
Branding in your client's control panel
Network status scripts for use on your own site
Merchant account with great rates
Free SSL to secure your own ordering process
Accounts on powerful dual dual-core systems [double dual-core, maybe?]
Permission to use our site design and all its content